discussion implementing multiple revision strategies 4

In a discussion board, discuss the steps you plan on taking to revise your critical analysis essay. Use the reading from earlier in this module as guidance.

When discussing these steps, be sure to point to specific areas of your draft that you plan on revising based on your reverse outline as well as instructor feedback, and explain how you will approach that process this week.

Before you begin writing, please review the discussion rubric below to make sure you fulfill all of the required tasks in your response.

Your initial post should be three fully developed paragraphs (5-8 sentences each).

When responding to two others, explore their potential revision strategies and offer additional tips and support. Keep an eye out for revision practices that may need fine-tuning for their specific essays. If you’ve learned something new that will help you, note it! Offer your own support by identifying specific areas and strategies to support their revisions.

Your response posts should each be two fully developed paragraphs (5-8 sentences each).

As with the first discussion, be sure to check back on this forum throughout the week to see what others have posted to your thread, and respond to questions and comments in an engaging manner. These follow-up posts will vary in length.

ENG 122 Discussion Rubric

Your active participation in the discussion forums is essential to your overall success this term. Discussion questions are designed to help you make meaningful connections between the course content and the larger concepts and goals of the course. These discussions offer you the opportunity to express your own thoughts, ask questions for clarification, and gain insight from your classmates’ responses and instructor’s guidance.

Requirements for Discussion Board Assignments

Students are required to post one initial post (1) and to follow up with at least two (2) response posts for each discussion board assignment.

For your initial post (1) you must:

  • Compose a post that fully addresses the assignment prompt.
  • In Module One, complete the initial post by Thursday at 11:59 p.m. Eastern Time.
  • In Module Seven, complete the initial post by Thursday at 11:59 p.m. of your local time zone.
  • Take into consideration material such as course content from the current module and previous modules, when appropriate.

For your response posts (2) you must:

  • Reply to at least two different classmates outside of your own initial post thread.
  • In Module One, complete the two response posts by Sunday at 11:59 p.m. Eastern Time.
  • In Module Seven, complete the two response posts by Sunday at 11:59 p.m. of your local time zone.
  • Demonstrate more depth and thought than simply stating that “I agree” or “You are wrong.” Guidance is provided for you in each discussion prompt.
Critical ElementsExemplary (100%)Proficient (85%)Needs Improvement (55%)Not Evident (0%)Value
PromptFully addresses assignment prompt, connecting personal experience and reflection in a rich, detailed, engaging mannerFully addresses assignment prompt, connecting personal experience and reflection in an engaging mannerAddresses assignment prompt, but there are holes or gaps in describing and reflecting on one’s personal experienceDoes not address assignment prompt20
ComprehensionDevelops an initial post with an organized, clear point of view or idea using rich and significant detailDevelops an initial post with a point of view or idea using adequate organization and detailDevelops an initial post with a point of view or idea but with some gaps in organization and detailDoes not develop an initial post with an organized point of view or idea25
TimelinessN/ASubmits initial post on time (100%)Submits initial post one day late (55%)Submits initial post two or more days late (0%)10
EngagementProvides relevant and meaningful response posts with clarifying explanation and detailProvides relevant response posts with some explanation and detailProvides response posts with some explanation and detail that may lack connection to original postProvides response posts that are generic with little explanation or detail25
Writing (Mechanics)Writes posts that are easily understood, clear, and concise, using proper citation methods where applicable with no errors in citationsWrites posts that are easily understood using proper citation methods where applicable with few errors in citationsWrites posts that are understandable using proper citation methods where applicable with a number of errors in citationsWrites posts that others are not able to understand and does not use proper citation methods where applicable20
1st response needed

Revision – Thu Apr 16 16:27
Joel Eastman

Over the time I have been writing this essay, I have learned a lot about writing essays and more specifically revision. I have learned how to create a good thesis statement, and how and where to restate the thesis statement. I also learned how revise my work and correct my grammar. I plan on using large scale revision to rework the themes and broader sense of the essay to help me reach my audience clearly and efficiently. I also plan on using small scale revision so as to have better grammar and punctuation.

My grammar has always been a part of my writing that has always been lacking. Not so much spelling mistakes but writing form and function have always been troubling for me. I tend to write how I speak which is a kind of open thought way of writing. This tends to me creating extreme run on sentences. It also creates the need for me to revise many times to clear up the main idea of my essay. Sometimes I will also revisit an idea from earlier in the essay in a part of the essay it doesn’t belong. This creates a jumbled mess of ideas and words that make it harder to understand.

To combat this I’ll need to use the large scale revision to put sentences where they belong. I’ll also use multiple small scale revisions when analyzing to separate a run on sentence into multiple sentences. This will hopefully help the flow of my essay and create a well thought out idea. Sense the clarity was always a major issue, I’ll use what I have learned to tighten up and make clear my ideas and points. The idea of my essay will hopefully come across much clearer due to the revision work I have done.

2nd response needed
Discussion 7-2 – Thu Apr 16 17:08

Natasha Dillon

First off this has been one of the most difficult essays I’ve ever had to write. Writing is not one of my best talents so I have set aside extra time to give this essay my all. After a couple days of over thinking I finally came up with the perfect clearly stated thesis statement. I then realized so much more work to do.I have to start with large scale revisions and rewrite most of my body to make sure my main points support my thesis statement. Our instructor advised me to develop my supporting points, this is where I plan to start.

Our instructor also advised me to fill in the missing part of my conclusion. I didn’t notice I never expressed what I learned from the article. This means even though I read my essay over and over I missed critical information that affected my grade. I went over the rubric again even though it wasn’t suggested as a revision strategy. I found it helpful to make sure I included everything that was necessary. Therefore my next step will be fixing my conclusion.

Last but certainly not least I will use small scale revisions order to correct my miss spelled words and punctuation. I will find all my grammar and sentence fragment issues. I will use family members for peer reading. Due to the world issues there’s not much else to do anyway. Overall learning about revision has gave me a better understanding of writing critical analysis essays correctly. This has made me a more confident writer.

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