research paper edit

– I just need you to edit subtopic #2 to be edit. The professor didn’t like what I wrote and I’m so confused how to fix it.

here is what he said. I did the other once I just need subtopic #2 to be edited using “google scholar” with citation.

-just the subtopic #2 only.

As far as content goes, you are hitting the major marks that we ask for in the paper. That said, while you have a few specific examples, some of your other examples are a bit more general. Look back through the papers and see if you can be a bit more detailed.

Your thoughts within each paragraph could use more organization. Sentences should flow into one another, and not be a series of related but disconnected thoughts. The way it is now, it can be a little hard to understand the point that each paragraph is trying to make. Maybe try breaking up your large paragraphs into smaller ones, with each of those paragraphs examine a specific point or example from that section.

Check your word choice. Some words you use do not mean what you think they do. Example: it does not make sense to refer to an ecosystem as “gullible”. You may be looking for “susceptible” or “vulnerable” instead.